I should probably be sleeping. Or being productive. : comments.
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That's mostly what worries me about that particular narrative trick - the narrator hasn't been a character in their own right for the rest of the story, and still isn't even in this moment; it's just that the point of view character is suddenly, specifically, cut off. Cutting off the text seemed like a way to indicate that without foreshadowing it (in an intentionally jarring way), but I'm worried that might come across as more like the comic-book example, which could end up unintentionally comic in what's supposed to be a creepy moment.
I don't know. There's a safer way to make that transition within the story and it'd probably be less confusing anyway, but on the other hand...Oh, I don't know. Maybe I'll see how it sounds once I've actually written this part. XD